Music Video Feedback

After showing my first draft to my class I got some feedback from all my class mates and teachers. Also I posted the video on Youtube.com and asked some of my friends on social media to watch it and give me some feedback too.

So these are some of the things people pointed out: 

- the narrative is unclear 

- not enough variety of shots 

- the performance needs to be serrated with narrative footage

- theres a guy (not an actor)  on the tube who looks straight into the camera and laughs.